The other thing I do not quite like about the book is the Amarr chapter, which seems to make it a point to bring up slavery over and over and over again. Also, the Amarr faith system isn't discussed in much details. Whole chunks about governance and politics, another whole chunks about slavery, nothing but references to The Scriptures, some snippets on what The Scriptures are and another huge chunk about slavery with smaller chunks interspersed into other chunks.
On the other hand, I felt that the Gallente chapter was relatively well written. It discusses alot about their democratic systems, and the times democracy failed, the different players of the Federation and exploring the multiple angles of the Federation, from the left to the right, from the Jin-Mei's caste system to the once-primitive Manarr slave-taking ways, from wealthy to destitute and that little thing about the Gallente smug cultural superiority and passive indoctrination of the Gallente way. The short story portion itself is also pretty well written, showing very well what the character thinks of his position, and of others and his naivete when dealing with the Civire musician.