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[Gwen Ikiryo]

Thanks for your feedback, Anslo!

The excessive "I" thing was a deliberate choice on my part. I wanted Gwens narrative voice to convey a feeling of consistent doubt and self-analysis - Even when writing in something completely private, she doesn't feel confident in stating her opinions and observations, or even personal feelings, as absolutes. And on the other side of the coin, it's also supposed to reflect a very self obsessed attitude; It's always all about her feelings, her worries, her fears (You can see in entry 7 where she tries to break free of this, but ultimately falls right back in by the end). I imagine she writes the log very much for the purpose of validating herself.

She's also supposed to be a History major, so I tried to make her writing a little dry and direct at times, since that's what she'd be used to.

Though I'm not oblivious to the negatives of this when judging the journal as a work, per se, I ultimately decided that sticking true to the character for something like this would be the better option, considering it isn't just written to entertain, but also as kind of a resource for people interested in the character herself on an OOC level. (And for me, should I ever forget what I'm doing.)

I can certainly change if it's not working, though?

[Anslol]

Well if that's what you're going for don't let criticism sway you to do otherwise. I just noticed a lot of I's. But if that's the intended effect then who am I to judge.

Keep on doin' what you're doin' and don't let anyone stop you or tell you otherwise.

[Gwen Ikiryo]

Well if that's what you're going for don't let criticism sway you to do otherwise. I just noticed a lot of I's. But if that's the intended effect then who am I to judge.

Keep on doin' what you're doin' and don't let anyone stop you or tell you otherwise.

Well, alright then.

I do appreciate you noting this, though, and hope it isn't too bothersome. I like the style - It feels really natural for the character - But if it's making the thing a displeasure to read and outright turning people off, that rather defeats the point, so if that's the case, I'd rather nip it in the bud.

[Anslol]

Well if that's what you're going for don't let criticism sway you to do otherwise. I just noticed a lot of I's. But if that's the intended effect then who am I to judge.

Keep on doin' what you're doin' and don't let anyone stop you or tell you otherwise.

Well, alright then.

I do appreciate you noting this, though, and hope it isn't too bothersome. I like the style - It feels really natural for the character - But if it's making the thing a displeasure to read and outright turning people off, that rather defeats the point, so if that's the case, I'd rather nip it in the bud.

Oh hell no it's not a displeasure to read. MY logs under my character sheet are probably a displeasure but that's just because I have NO idea how else to convey Anslo's story.

But no it works just dandy. It convey's Gwen's feelings well and sort of solidifies Anslo's thoughts about Gwen. She confuses him because he thinks Gwen is so smart, but she's not confident. He thinks she should be much more confident in her dealings. But the journal gives good insight.

Either way, I'd still fluffle Gwen. Flufflable/10, would fluffle gently.

[Ava Starfire]

I like your background. I like your character! \o/

This

[Natalcya Katla]

I'm having a great time interacting with Gwen.

[Ché Biko]

Interesting...
Gwen is somewhat like a female Caldari version of Ché, some of the internal struggles are very familiar, yet for different reasons or with other factors influencing them. I'm curious to see how she will deal with them and what "thruths" she'll find.

[Lyn Farel]

I have not interacted a lot with Gwen, unfortunately.

It's a nice character.

[Tiberious Thessalonia]

That latest blog post is brilliant :O

[Gwen Ikiryo]

That latest blog post is brilliant :O

Oh, thanks! I'm glad that you thought so.

I actually spent quite a while considering taking it down and redoing it, heh. Something about the writings pacing didn't sit right with me. But it's good to hear that it works.

[Tiberious Thessalonia]

Gwen, don't be thinking that people aren't reading the blog just because they aren't commenting.  WANT MOAR!

[Natalcya Katla]

Echoing Tib's sentiment. More Gwen blog please. 

[ArtOfLight]

Only just finished the blog myself and woah, what a blog! Looking for moar!

[Gwen Ikiryo]

Ahh, you guys.  I'm really flattered.

I've been working on another writing project at the moment for easter, which has sapped a bit of my mental energy for the blog, but I should be back to making entries for it soon.

[Shintoko Akahoshi]

I really like this a lot! I like the way you address questions of humanity and post-humanity in your blog that most other people tend to take for granted.

I do have a question about Gwen's original background, though. Gwen's father transferred assets to small corporations that he owned, and shifted the corporations to be GalFed-based, correct? Why did he then return to Achura and accept a devastating demotion, instead of simply leaving the State along with the corporations he owned? I think the fact that he didn't do this probably points to some interesting core values on his part.