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[ExecutorElassus]

Hi Backstage,

attached here is the first chapter (replies will have subsequent ones) of a long-form fanfic I'm writing. At present I have the first three and an interlude complete, comprising about 20% of the total. If you're wondering how exactly this is supposed to be an EVE fanfic, please also see my short-story submission to last year's Pod & Planet, which you can find here: https://forums.eveonline.com/t/pod-planet-contest-submission-watcher-of-relics/31908

I'd like some help reading over the story I've attached, constructive criticism, checking for consistency (both internally and lore-wise), criticism of pacing, writing style, dialogue, etc. etc. My eventual goal is to have this as a full-length story, and to try to get it published in some manner. So if you like it, and want to see more of it, please let me know that as well.

As usual, please feel free to share it with others you think might be interested, with the usual caveats about proper attribution, etc.

Hope you enjoy, and thanks in advance for the help.

Cheers,

Elassus Herron
(sorry the files are broken up. Size limits, etc)

[ExecutorElassus]

Chapter 2 attached

[ExecutorElassus]

Chapter 3 and an interlude

[ExecutorElassus]

Update: moved around a bit of the interlude from the previous post, putting it at the end of the (new!) Chapter 4, and adding the part divider for the next section, currently being written. Enjoy!

[ExecutorElassus]

Update! Here's Chapter 5: a different scene!

As always, comments and (constructive!) criticism is welcome. Enjoy.

[ExecutorElassus]

Update! Here's Chapter 6: continued from Chapter 5.

As always, comments and criticism are welcome and requested.

Enjoy!

EE

[ExecutorElassus]

The plot thickens!

Here is Chapter 7. Finally, after 100 pages (spoiler) the story actually gets going.

Enjoy! As always, if you have comments, or anything, please feel free to leave them here, or reach out to me on Tweetfleet or ingame.

[ExecutorElassus]

It's a Yoiul miracle!

Here is Chapter 8. Sorry it took me so long, hope you haven't forgotten all about this, etc etc.

Anyway, enjoy, and happy holidays.

o7

[ExecutorElassus]

HOLY CRAP

Man, it has been way too long, hasn't it? I'm really sorry I've let this slip. But here's the next chapter. I'll probably add some more to this one later on, so watch this link in case I update.

Thanks so much for your patience! Hope you enjoy!

o7
EH

[kul Shaishi]

What level of technology is a Achura at this point in time

[ExecutorElassus]

@kul, sorry for the late reply. This is pre-contact Achura, roughly midway between the landfall they made in colony ships and contact (by which point they had recovered from the Long Winter period but were still pre-industrial). So I'd put them equivalent to, say, Tang Dynasty China, or Roman Empire levels of technology, with maybe some remnants from earlier eras, but definitely on a declining arc.

[ExecutorElassus]

Hi folks,

yikes, it has been a horribly long time since I last updated this. But like you probably did, I had a really rough 2020. Here's a short end to this section of the story, looking forward to being able to write more in better times ahead.

o7
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