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The Sani Sabik sectarian law-enforcement organization is called the Bleeders, and is a combination of priests and policemen? (The Burning Life, p. 18)

Author Topic: [Story] Concussion  (Read 1207 times)

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[Story] Concussion
« on: 18 Jul 2010, 23:04 »
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Re: [Story] Concussion
« Reply #1 on: 18 Jul 2010, 23:16 »
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She tried to turn enough to see through the cockpit door and lost his next words to a stab of pain. Spirits fuck my ancestors.

Typo?


Otherwise, interesting read. It feels disjointed, although I think that's the design intention.
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Re: [Story] Concussion
« Reply #2 on: 18 Jul 2010, 23:39 »
She turns, Silver say something but she misses it because of the pain. The spirits fuck my ancestors is her thought (re: the pain).

The disjointedness is intentional, yeah.

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