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Author Topic: YC 118 New Eden Capsuleer Writing Contest Entry- Felise Selunix  (Read 876 times)

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YC 118 New Eden Capsuleer Writing Contest Entry- Felise Selunix
« on: 30 Oct 2016, 21:36 »
So...a 30,000 word limit ya say...well...

A short story of from Felise was working on during the doldrums of getting Keyholder off the ground


A Friend In Need

A riveting tale of woe in the form of a short story by Felise Selunix

 
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Re: YC 118 New Eden Capsuleer Writing Contest Entry- Felise Selunix
« Reply #1 on: 01 Nov 2016, 00:41 »
I read up till '2. Mormur' and quite enjoy this piece of pulp fiction. However, I found grammatical errors here and there. You might want to proofread your work some more.
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Re: YC 118 New Eden Capsuleer Writing Contest Entry- Felise Selunix
« Reply #2 on: 01 Nov 2016, 12:35 »
Drat!  I was afraid of that.  I usually have a friend proofread any long pieces that I do, but there wasn't time to do that and make the deadline this time around (crazy month workwise).  I may have some time to look over it again this weekend though.

Thanks for reading through it though, and for the feedback!  If people like it, I'll come through with a part II.
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