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EVE-Online RP Discussion and Resources => EVE Character Development => Topic started by: Carmilla on 25 Apr 2010, 10:22
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Name: Carmilla D'morenta
It's about time this was redone to a more.... up to date version.
Carm
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Your backstory has a lot of substance that might benefit from a bit pore proofreadin'.
Ish kinda hard to read; there's a lot going on and while the use of spacing is a help, some sentence structure reframing and some work to smooth out the text would help a lot.
Feel free to ignore this, mind - I got the gist of the thing in the end. If you DO have an urge to improve its clarity some, I'll be glad to help you there.