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Title: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Ken on 10 Nov 2010, 05:53
The poem and thread share their name with my main's beloved Loki (as much as I have a "main").  This is also a direct response to this little story (http://backstage.eve-inspiracy.com/index.php?topic=1223.msg14391#msg14391) by Mammal Tafren.

Dreams of Yasur
Ravede enDama
YC112

By night the sea winds whisper
A berceuse of salt and foam
Forgotten as they have the notes
Of this ashen ballad's home

In the place where we were born
The mountain slumbers, and I
Beneath our quilt of stars
A hundred billion children's sky

But what dreams noble Yasur
I muse, ancestor to us all
Are you standing silent vigil
Now until the heav'ns fall

This unbidden wonder seeps
Through my breath, a weary sigh
Is sacrifice enough to earn
From the mountain this reply

Thunder and torrent!
And showering of flame
A thousand cities smote
My curiosity to blame

I tremble to behold these
Nightmare visions of the peak
Wake, I cry, dream no more
When Yasur begins to speak

Crashing rock and hissing steam
The continent upheaved
It is an earthen voice, of course
And one centuries bereaved

Having seen the future history of
So many sons and daughters gone
In one final night of fire
Yasur burned until the dawn

Its children bade the mountain calm
There was no cause to mourn
In frustration it withdrew
For Yasur's purpose was to warn

A destiny of light awaits, they say
Those who rise above to meet
The winged gods, but stay
You are safer on your feet

Walk the land and breathe the air
Pick the fruit and take a wife
What awaits you in the void
Is not a happy life

They did not see, they could not
Through their new adventure's hue
So let the old god rest, they did
And unto the heavens flew

All this Yasur speaks, clear
In the logic of a dream
And I ask the god, the mountain
Of it's revelation's scheme

Broken nature's cipher, made
Alike the waters and the tree
Its scattered children bask in health
Fortune and prosperity

But oh, these gifts were never free
And the loan is coming due
This future bought with promise
Has transformed a certain few

Among Yasur's children stride
Inhuman offspring of the stars
Fusion hot, their trodden paths
Sear a hundred billion scars

My wonder turns to trepidation
And then again to fear
Dare I posit why, Yasur
Has explained this to me here

Unseated bedrock crumbles
But unmoved, I realize
Yasur, this god, a brother, has
Seen through my human guise

Those few so gifted, attain
A new transhuman ideal
And steal the skies and stars
To bring the universe to heel

Serving no gods, these angels
By force and fiat reign
The heavens and the lands
In neither peace nor pity's name

Unleashed they are, unbound
By loyalty to sense
Saving nothing of grace nor
Love for interactions hence

The mountain meant to alarm
And to beg its children flee
From these butchers of the worlds
And their vicious destiny

In the place where we were born
The mountain slumbers, and I
Beneath our quilt of stars
A hundred billion children's sky

I stir as dawn arrives to
Tease the edges of the world
Kiss the mountain with its light
And a cobalt canopy unfurl

The tide beholds the spinning
Of the moons and makes to lean
Nearer to the shore, it soaks
My feet and halts my dream

Awake, I shivver 'gainst the chill
Of the early seaside morning
And wrap myself with blankets
To consider Yasur's warning

For the children who would leave
The story tells that Yasur wept
And with the dawning of a thought
Onto my feet I find I've leapt

I grit my teeth against the cold and
Behold the mountain and the sea
And at once I know the truth
O, Yasur warned of me
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Valdezi on 10 Nov 2010, 14:17
I'm still working on my response to this, Ken.

This is awesome, btw. I would love to see more EVE poetry.
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Ken on 14 Jul 2012, 13:58
I've been thinking about doing this for a long time.  Finally did:

http://youtu.be/iQ_UiIYarhg?hd=1
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Morwen Lagann on 14 Jul 2012, 19:54
I'd try to explain my response in words beyond "holy crap that's awesome" but it'd probably just come out in gibberish.

So I gave it some #tweetfleet exposure instead. :3
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Valdezi on 15 Jul 2012, 02:30
So amazing, Ken. Beautifully read and the reading really helps the Imagery in the poem come alive. Also, using the music from Gattaca was an inspired choice.
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Post by: Saede Riordan on 15 Jul 2012, 12:25
Wow....that was amazingly beautiful.
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Post by: Malcolm Khross on 15 Jul 2012, 16:45
I have said it many times, but I will say it again:

You are an incredibly talented individual Ken, this was beyond words.
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Post by: Katrina Oniseki on 16 Jul 2012, 08:09
I forwarded that video to CCP's Facebook, and it seems they've featured it on their timeline. Congratulations, Ken and Val!

Quote from:  EVE Online Official Facebook
EVE Online
‎"This future bought with promise
Has transformed a certain few"

A beautiful creation, this.
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Ken on 16 Jul 2012, 09:50
 :eek: :D

Thanks Kat!
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Post by: Kohiko Sun on 16 Jul 2012, 14:22
Putting it to voice is just... wow.
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Post by: Victoria Stecker on 16 Jul 2012, 14:23
Yeah, this is phenomenal. If it isn't your best work, it's pretty damned close.
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Post by: Telsa on 21 Jul 2012, 13:27
Oh wow. Just... wow. Such beautiful lament.
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Post by: Graelyn on 21 Jul 2012, 21:12
\o/

\o/\o/  :cube:
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Post by: Gottii on 23 Jul 2012, 07:51
It does my heart good to see this poem written for a Loki.

A Drake never inspired such words!
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Post by: Saxon Hawke on 25 Jul 2012, 09:27
I know the term "epic" gets overused a lot these days, but that's the best word I can think of to describe how awesome this poem and presentation are.

You, sir, are a true talent.
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Ken on 26 Sep 2012, 18:55
Thrilled this was featured on Massively's EVE column earlier this week. :D  Tip of the hat in the article to Kyoko as well.

http://massively.joystiq.com/2012/09/23/eve-evolved-four-great-new-eve-videos/
Title: Re: Dreams of Yasur
Post by: Natalcya Katla on 26 Sep 2012, 19:18
Bravo.  :D
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Post by: NISYN Aelisha on 27 Sep 2012, 13:07
Good stuff Hoshi, we should talk creatively when you get back from your IRL duties.
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Post by: Daniel LSiata on 03 Oct 2012, 09:50
This was absolutely amazing.

Hats off.