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Title: [Story] Concussion
Post by: Silver Night on 18 Jul 2010, 23:04

Find it here: http://silvernight-fiction.blogspot.com/2010/07/concussion.html

Co-Authored with Ciarente of Ciarente's Fiction (http://ciarentesfiction.blogspot.com/) and Personal Files, Ciarente Roth (http://ciarentediary.blogspot.com/)

Hope you enjoy it.  :D

Title: Re: [Story] Concussion
Post by: Ghost Hunter on 18 Jul 2010, 23:16

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She tried to turn enough to see through the cockpit door and lost his next words to a stab of pain. Spirits fuck my ancestors.

Typo?


Otherwise, interesting read. It feels disjointed, although I think that's the design intention.

Title: Re: [Story] Concussion
Post by: Silver Night on 18 Jul 2010, 23:39

She turns, Silver say something but she misses it because of the pain. The spirits fuck my ancestors is her thought (re: the pain).

The disjointedness is intentional, yeah.