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Author Topic: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi  (Read 1209 times)

Valdezi

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Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« on: 26 Jul 2012, 00:19 »
Victuals

Even before, I remember red,
weeping red, like the lone rose
against Jita station chrome.
Too costly, I passed it by.

Though at the time it seemed perfect,
I remember now how stubborn aphids
had chewed away at its goodness,
tiny tears in the red petals
and the cluster of thorns on the stem.

You loved the red
of a heart eaten raw
lifted to your smiling mouth
your teeth stained
your red rictus
twin lines framing your chin
swiftly drying to a crust.

A man more wise
might have known to step around
a cooling pool of blood,
two damp trails leading off
and the grim white reflection.

Instead, my toes disturb the almost-dry surface
brush aside the browning skin
to reveal slick and sticky red
coating the tips indelibly.

It was nothing. Consumed
by a single gout of red flame,
crumbled to ash.
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Re: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« Reply #1 on: 26 Jul 2012, 00:22 »
This is an early draft. I've been reading a great deal of Ted Hughes (which might be apparent to some) and thinking about how Hughes deals with the misery of a relationship self-destructing.

Another interesting source for some of this is "Hospice" by the Antlers, a truly epic and depressing album about a relationship ending while one of the people invovled dies of cancer. Yeah. It's depressing. But awesome.

So I thought about Val would deal with his world being shifted, from his perspective and it came out in this poem.

Also, Ken inspired me to write more.  :cube:
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Re: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« Reply #2 on: 26 Jul 2012, 05:40 »
So many talented writers and artists in our RP community. It almost makes me feel like a talentless hack in comparison.

Keep writing, this is good.
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Re: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« Reply #3 on: 26 Jul 2012, 15:18 »
Quote from: ArtOfLight on 26 Jul 2012, 05:40
So many talented writers and artists in our RP community. It almost makes me feel like a talentless hack in comparison.

Keep writing, this is good.

What he said!

I wonder what you will come up with when your mind turns from blood to love.   :P
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Re: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« Reply #4 on: 27 Jul 2012, 01:30 »
Quote from: Syagrius on 26 Jul 2012, 15:18
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I wonder what you will come up with when your mind turns from blood to love.   :P

^^ Me interesa también!  :)
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Re: Victuals - Poetry by Valdezi
« Reply #5 on: 15 Aug 2012, 18:12 »
Out of curiosity, being as this is IC poetry - poetry written by the character, rather than about them, would one post this in EVE fiction, or the IGS if one were to post it on the Eve Forums?
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