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[Character] Carmilla D'Morenta

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Carmilla:
Name: Carmilla D'morenta

It's about time this was redone to a more.... up to date version.

Carm

Ashar Kor-Azor:
Your backstory has a lot of substance that might benefit from a bit pore proofreadin'.

Ish kinda hard to read; there's a lot going on and while the use of spacing is a help, some sentence structure reframing and some work to smooth out the text would help a lot.

Feel free to ignore this, mind - I got the gist of the thing in the end. If you DO have an urge to improve its clarity some, I'll be glad to help you there.

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